Through the biggest waves,
Through the hottest of fires,
Through the deepest caves,
Amidst all the love I acquire.
There’s still something missing,
A void nobody else can replace,
A place specifically meant for you,
A place I tried to fill with someone new.
I’ve realized now this effort is futile,
You’re better than everyone else by a mile.
All I want everyday is to see you smile,
It sucks that I haven’t seen you in a long while.
But I’ll try my best to be patient and wait,
Maybe use flowers and some chocolates as bait,
Always look for you through my building’s gate,
Hopefully someday I’ll show you off to my mates.
-The Travellothoner
delightful… and accompanied with this song it melts completely… try it please, https://open.spotify.com/track/1c8SFxsZNstJ5cW4mQqIQS (Between the Line │ Matt Andersen)
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Thank you 🙂
I shall definitely listen to it!
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Evade the wait and wade towards fate.
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Some very wise words. Thank you 🙂
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and thank you for sharing your writing mate
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Beautiful
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Thank you 🙂
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Great stuff, we probably all know someone this could apply to but c’est la vie.
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Indeed. Sad but true!
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Lovely 🌷
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Thank you 🙂
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Hi there 🙂🙂
I notice you have many followers and a seemingly successful blog.
How do you do it? How did you get so much interest?
I’m really passionate about writing and I want more people to read my ideas 🎨
Thank you so much 🤠
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I browse other people’s blogs too. I leave comments and ask them to read mine.
And I use my social media to spread the word about my blog 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
Do you have lots of friends on your socials? I’ve posted my stuff a lot but haven’t gotten much of a response I guess.
Do you have any tips about increasing my effectiveness of spreading my stuff on socials?
Thanks so much for your prompt reply 😁
P.s what’s your socials? I’d love to follow you, I’m very into health and fitness too.
P.P.s your writing is great; I want to get better at your style of poetry.
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I admire your poetic sentiment but there are quite a few structural issues here, especially with the awkward rhyme. It’s also quite emotionally observational, and as such misses any punch.
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You are entitled to your opinion of course but from what I know: Poets do not or are not obligated to obey or follow any rules in writing. E.E.Cummings is one example of that.
I suggest reading Ted Kooser’s Poetry home repair manual
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I know the feeling. It’s very difficult.
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It sure is 😦
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Really nice
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Thank you 🙂
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The wait can sometimes be excruciatingly painful and immense heartache.
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Beautiful writing and message. I think we’ve all had this feeling at one point or another, though it feels good to know one is not alone in this feeling!
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Thank you so much:)
I am glad you can relate with my words!
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This passes. “Heartily know, when half-gods go, the gods arrive.” Ralph Waldo Emerson. Just a thought with something that always helped me keep perspective.
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Wise words, Thank you 🙂
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Super adorable. I hope you eventually get the courage to give this to her.
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Thank you so much!
Hopefully soon 🙂
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The wait can seem so long at times it’s unreal!
But in the end, if it’s all worth it then great..
And if not…well I guess it’s then up to us to somehow make it worth it 🙂
Which is so hard to achieve..but essential for our own good…:(
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Beautiful rendition of a lyric from the heart. Anand Bose from Kerala
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Thank you 🙂
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Excellent poem!
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Thank you 😄
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